In Other Words #2

The first thing I noticed after reading "In Other Words" is that my essay does not contain a title, other than "Unit 3", so it will be hard for any audience to have a sense of what the essay is about. After re-reading my Unit 3 piece, I noticed there is hardly any metacommentary. I think I did a good job of thoroughly explaining my ideas, but the use of metacommentary could probably help elaborate further my ideas and points. Instead of re-posting my entire essay on this post, I have just selected two instances where I feel the use of metacommentary is appropriate.

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As the campaign seems to have started successful, the dreadful economic crisis has already forced the Foundation to push the 2011-projected completion date to 2013. In other words, the sponsors that have donated to the campaign can only donate so much. Like most of us, even companies and groups in our area have felt the financial hardships that this country is enduring. In other words, the Foundation is now turning to the community throughout Kentuckiana for additional financial support to help see the campaign to fruition.

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The 30 hours of community service that I endured then helped me realize now that our community needs the Falls like the Falls needs the community. Consider the volunteering aspect, for example. The dozen or so large, black trash bags that I filled with garbage and debris during those hours were not just helping me fill out my required punishment. I was also aiding in the Foundation’s mission of the preservation of the Falls. Even more important, I noticed that most of the volunteers helping out that day were truly devoted to cleaning up and preserving the Falls for the future. Although it may seem troublesome for some people within the community, volunteering opportunities seem always available at the Falls and are also great ways to support the Foundation, even in the harshest of economies.